A very interesting thing happened during the first scene of the rewrite of the second half of DREAMSHIP. I got about halfway through when I realized my hero was just sitting there, doing nothing. And that ain’t right! He’s supposed to be the one driving the action, pushing the story ahead. Fortunately, it’s easily fixed. But it got me thinking.
Since finishing the first half rewrite, I’m more careful going into each scene. You could even call it overthinking. Does this scene advance the story, theme and character? (A cardinal but often-ignored rule for screenwriting) Does it follow the one before it and lead to the one after it? If I take it out, will it impact the rest of the story? I also realize taking the time to analyze each scene with such intense scrutiny will slow me down. The feeling of getting stuff done will vanish.
In some ways, just storming ahead seems like a great way to go. But then there’s the whole issue of going back and fixing things. But if I apply the proverbial fine-tooth comb, then it won’t be fun. And will take longer than I’d like.
I think rather than move ahead on pages, I’ll go through the outline and edit accordingly, thereby saving valuable time during the page-writing period as well as trimming some fat from the story.
-I’ve read some of the scripts from the 2011 Black List. So far, not too impressive. I liked the 2010 selections much better.
-Movie of the Moment – 9 (2009). A really interesting animated film that came and went from theaters pretty quickly. I can see why. Set in a post-apocalyptic world, a band of foot-high dolls struggles to survive. This is probably not the best way to describe it, but it’s all I can think of.
While the story is a little unusual, I thought it was a great take on the genre. Really clever use of the animation and each doll had a distinct personality and appearance that made it easy to distinguish one from another.
My only complaints: a slightly confusing resolution to the main conflict, and a lot of back-and-forth in terms of moving the story forward. I think the main character said “We have to go back!” at least twice. It’s never explained how the dolls function, but in the end doesn’t really matter.
I didn’t realize this was based on a ten-minute short, which was included on the DVD, but I didn’t get a chance to watch it. Tim Burton and Timur Bekmambetov were among the producers, and it’s easy to see the influence of each.