Okay. I’m back from a rousing hockey tournament at Lake Tahoe, where V’s team came in 3rd out of 6, including their 2 wins with her in goal. In fact, she was awarded the MVP puck for their 8-1 victory on Saturday night. Overall, it was very exciting. Cold, but exciting.
Just before we left, I was introduced to Triggerstreet.com, a screenwriting review/forum website (Kevin Spacey is one of the founders). Part of the way they work is having members review other members’ scripts. I haven’t submitted anything yet, but plan to in the near future.
But it was the forum that especially intrigued me. I decided to take the plunge and posted a question about my logline for LUCY. I did that on Thursday afternoon. By the evening, I had a few responses and something like 75 views. What’s cool about the set-up is that you can opt to get an email notification that somebody’s responded to your post. A lot of the drive up to Tahoe was spent checking them out.
I have to say I got some really good feedback, and even better, got what I feel is a stronger logline for the story. I thought about posting that 3 Stooges one just to see what people think, but I’ll hold off for a little while.
Speaking of which, I sent in the old LUCY logline and the 3 Stooges one to the logline contest. Neither one won, but honestly, I don’t really think that much of some recent winners. I may try again with the new LUCY one. It’s a wait-and-see situation.
-As much as I thought/hoped it might happen this weekend, I didn’t get a lot of work done on the outline.
So now that I’ve got an outline I like much better, I felt I had to start over with it, albeit with a few minor changes. But as I was looking it over, there didn’t seem to be much I thought had to come out. There are still a few places where I may have to make some slight readjustments, but it may not be as daunting a project as I originally thought.
And I may have stumbled onto a solution for moving the story along. All I have to do now is figure out how to incorporate it into the story. Which I think I can do
Movie of the Moment: A few to go over. First the original BAD NEWS BEARS. The other girl on V’s hockey team owns this, and we watched it on Saturday afternoon. Watching it now as a parent is a lot different than when I was a lot closer to the age of a lot of the cast. It was really weird watching Walter Matthau, especially since I’ve seen more of his work in recent years.
But the story and the writing still hold up. Some good jokes sprinkled around here and there, but more would have been nice. It’s also really weird to have a PG movie from the mid-70s have so much mild cursing in it. From a writing point of view, the character development is strictly textbook, but effective. What was also clever was that only a handful of scenes are set inside; a majority are set at the ball field. And you get to know almost all of the kids on the team; just a handful don’t serve much purpose. I know they made a remake with Billy Bob Thornton a few years ago, but I don’t see the point.
The other movie was LOST IN SPACE, only because it was on TV today while I was working. I saw this in the theater back in 1998, and enjoyed it. Not a lot, but worth the $6 for the matinee. Incidentally, this would be a great choice for the Filmsack guys.
But looking at it today, it really drags in some places and the dialogue doesn’t really do much for me. I still don’t understand why they didn’t just kill Gary Oldman’s Dr Smith. He tried to sabotage their mission and they still let him live? Ridiculous. And don’t get me started on the cgi monkey alien. Lame.
Akiva Goldsman, who wrote it (as well as BATMAN & ROBIN, but also A BEAUTIFUL MIND – go figure), has become more of a producer and has thankfully let his writing career diminish. While I love the concept of the movie, this one just felt forced and could have been a little shorter. Still, to me it’s one of the slightly better 60s-TV-show-based films, as opposed to that big ol’ chunk of cinematic Velveeta known as WILD WILD WEST.
Now just try to get that gigantic steampunk spider-tank out of your mind.