I think I mentioned there was this listing on Craigslist last week for somebody looking for a writer to put together a ‘mash-up’ story involving the Old West, goth horror and martial arts.
So I wrote in, expressing interest. The guy wrote back relatively quickly and included his 20-page treatment.
It was interesting. But I’m not sure so much backstory has to go into a treatment. I always thought it was more or less a prose-style summary of the story being told on the page. I’ll have to look into that.
But getting back to his treatment…
I think there’s something wrong when you don’t get to the main story until the middle of the 4th single-spaced page OF THE TREATMENT! Way too much stuff beforehand that can easily be summed up in a scene or two. And a whole lot of info about characters who are killed within a few pages. Why so much?
I’m sure every writer is sick of hearing this, but there’s definitely a lot of potential in this thing. It’s all a question of putting it all together.
Unfortunately, there doesn’t seem to be a solid main storyline. More like a lot of vignettes with a barely-there common thread. And there are some scenes that seem to come out of nowhere. For example: the lesbian love affair between the 2 main female characters. How did this happen? I hope it’s not just an excuse to have a nude scene. There are more creative and story-based ways to do that.
So for the next day or two, I’ll be working on my scene. I’m looking at this more like an exercise than a job application; a way to test/flex my writing muscles.
The guy asked about how much I thought it would cost, and I really had no idea. I still don’t. Is it by the hour? By the page? K suggests I ask for a co-writing credit. If the guy is going to submit it to competitions or even take it out for representation, I think I’ll have earned at least my name in the mix.
And I wouldn’t say no to some cash either…
Almost forgot. I also wrote to that just-graduated film student looking for a ‘professional’ to proofread his script. I offered myself up for the gig. I’ll be surprised if he responds, and even more surprised if he says yes. I bet he won’t, but you never know.
Movie of the Moment: We’ll probably watch the new episode of VENTURE BROS later. I hope it’s better than last season; way disappointing.
But I can’ t recommend PUSHING DAISIES enough. The writing and acting on it are so well done. I think the fact it’s a smart, clever show that requires you to think is why it didn’t do well. But we like it.
Since it’s only one season, which is about 12-13 shows, I’m trying to figure out what show to do next. I keep going back and forth between BATTLESTAR GALACTICA and MAD MEN. Decisions, decisions.
ENTOURAGE ended with Vince’s career in coke-fueled limbo and Ari’s marriage in trouble. Virtually nothing about Drama. Turtle and this whole tequila thing – boring. And E may have to sign a pre-nup. I thought this show was about their lives in the industry. That comment I read about this being SEX AND THE CITY for guys is becoming more true. Now I just have to wait until next season…