Today’s topic: your very first script.
Yeah, that one. The one you’re embarrassed to even remember. The one with all the rookie mistakes.
The one that set you on this journey.
Title: THE CRIMSON CLOAK
What it was about: Set in 1950’s Hollywood, a writer on a popular kids TV show mistakenly believes the sponsor is going to kill a megastar live on the air and goes all out to stop him.
Tell-tale signs this is a first script? Way, way too much expository dialogue, including a lot of on-the-nose lines. Flimsy character motivation. A lot of writing-directing.
Would you be willing to rewrite it now? Definitely.
Addendum: Despite all of the problems this script had, it managed to be a top 10 percent finisher in the Nicholl for that year. I have no idea how that happened, but this, combined with a professional writer telling me “You’re a very talented writer,” were a great start to my writing career.
What about you? Don’t be shy. No judging here.